All in all, when people listen fast food they associate this to wrong and
unhealthy food like McDonalds or Burger King, although not always so. Incredibly, there are fast food that is good for
our body.
On the one hand, fast food is very cheap and
quick to make, for this reason people prefers eat in a fast food restaurant
than in other kind of places. Furthermore, not only, you can order food from
your home but also, you can order it by Internet. Nowadays, restaurants owners
are looking the form to turn the bad fast food into healthy fast food, it would
be a good deal!
Moreover, if you eat lot of fast food every weeks,
you will have overweight and another health problems, because this type of food
has a lot of calories and fat. In addition,
much of restaurants shouldn’t cook with foods that aren’t fresh because this
problem cause illness. What’s more, the way that they get meat or fish is bad
for the planet.
To sum up, in small amount the fast food isn’t bad
for people but you mustn’t eat much if you don’t want to end up sick. In my
opinion, young people would prefer to eat fast food rather than eat vegetables
or fruit, why? I don’t know, I suppose that is for contradict to our mothers
when they say us that we would have to eat healthy.
Your essay is really long, more than 200 words.
ResponderEliminarlisten / hear
associate this to --- associate this with
there are fast food --- there is fast food
people prefers
a good deal
every weeks
have overweight --- get overweight
another health problems --- other health problems
has a lot of calories --- contain
much of restaurants - quantifiers
they get meat or fish -- very general
To sum up, in small amount the fast food isn’t bad for people but you mustn’t eat much if you don’t want to end up sick. --- PUNCTUATION
for contradict to our --- in order to contradict our
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